[ChicletPrime]

Chapter 5: Visitation

• alright, scene opens on another part of Caleb's living room with an open concept kitchen to the right and this author notes there are apples in a bowl on the counter.  that's a nice little touch. weather outside is windy with rain.
  
• i really need Sylus to be lurking in a nearby bedroom or something - girlfriend can't put two thoughts together.
  
• i do like that one of the options is to immediately tell Caleb to open my can of soda. c'mon gege, heeeelp meeee.
  
• Inappropriate Use Of Evol
  
• ah. fear of thunder since it sounds like a roaring Wanderer.
  
• memories of hide and seek: "we probably have a telepathic connection."
  
• another fanfic struggles to be born, weak and malformed
  
• okay, so the kids that got blown up by Joseph's bomb are twins, Kevi (missing) and Mia (hospital).
  
• oh shit.
  
• oh crap, is that what's going on? Ever staged another random act of violence using one of their experimental patsies, already 70% on the way to completely breaking down as a Wanderer, took out the likely-to-object parents and snatched the telepathic kids? oh god damn it, that makes so much horrible sense.
  
• i... i don't know if i can trust you, Caleb. love and trust are not synonyms.
  
• "his sister must be worried sick about him right now. she probably wants to be with Kevi again."  well, don't say it right out loud like that, girlfriend! so far, Caleb has definitely shown more presence of mind than you have, he's gonna figure you out.
  
• well, how about that. Caleb relents and as long as i 'take care of myself' i can continue to investigate. even against the Fleet's direct orders of non-interference? and, i don't know, does the Colonel have a different opinion on this?
  
• "after everything draws to a close... can you come home with me?"  oh. oh, sweetheart. i don't think that's at all in the cards for your pilot.
  
• NEXT AM: a hearty breakfast, a chipper little voicemail and off to the hospital we go.
  
• oops, no bueno, no visitors, very unstable little girl in critical care.
  
• ZAYNE!?
  
• why am i startled. he's a specialist doctor, this is a hospital... still. Dr Zayne, HOW ARE YOU!
  
• storylines, nearly touching, brushing past each other like ghosts.
  
• great, just great. Mia wants to know if her brother is dead, because she can't find him and she always finds him.
  
• telepathy busted or blocked, it seems.
  
• "your brother wouldn't just leave you. he probably got into a bit of trouble."  OH THE PARALLELS
  
• i think the kid just slipped me a 'help me i'm being kidnapped' note in a dog plushie.