[ChicletPrime]

Oh! Forgot to add something to a comment you made: wouldn't you say Jeremiah's voice and Caleb's voice sound very much alike?
I wouldn't be surprised if it turned out it's the same VA.

eh, you think? i didn't hear a resemblance but when it comes up again i'll pay more attention. i just noted (to myself and then eventually you) that the VA on Jeremiah was definitely an actual VA and not an office intern pressed into service, the quality of the delivery was heads and shoulders above most other side characters. the only other one i can think of quickly that also gave a good account of themselves was Viper. 

and i don't mean to bitch too much about the writing quality here, but yeah, you are picking up what i am putting down it seems. i can hear Xavier being frustrated, as he should be, and having misunderstandings over each other for a solid 70% of the play is how it's supposed to go, but MC just.. isn't a girlfriend in this one. at all. she's just there taking up protagonist space as she flings exposition around willy nilly. 

i've hit about four scenes already that i just want to re-write, if only to satisfy myself with a better canon version. not even to explore a new idea or anything, just to zip tie the real thing together better, yanno? smush those rough edges together until they smooth out under pressure.

i really do want to write something for Jeremiah. toss that on the pile for December.